Sometimes I wish you'd stop bragging
You can't even run with those feet dragging
You try to hard too fit in
You might as well climb in the garbage bin
Your hair is like a birds nest
I don't even want to mention the rest
You always talk about that boy
But please you're just his toy
Your voice burns my ears
Can't believe I've dealt with you for so many years
Your clothes are like rags
You could fit in with the old hags
The sun is brighter than your future
After that one you may need a suture
Your whole life is just sad
I just thought I'd tell you with the chance I had
This has great word play!
ReplyDeleteNext time have it edited.
Be more descriptive!
The sound of your poem it just made me laugh
ReplyDeleteI can't even explain in words it was such a craft
Your words were descriptive but also short and sweet
I wish I had Twitter because this would be a good tweet
Your harsh words made me cry with joy
Did I mention it was funny when you said she was just his toy
Your word play was just plain out fantastic
Too bad it wasn't more drastic
Your poem’s fire
ReplyDeleteAll of your rhymes really worked
Very creative
Your scheme was boring
Don’t just do A A BB
Try A B A B
When I read your poem it made me smile.
ReplyDeleteBecause you’re creativity and accuracy went on for miles.
Next time you should should spit more fire.
If you think you’re bad you’re a liar.
Do more description
So your poem will have flare
Overall it’s great.